Karhul
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Your right, it's a letter to a friend, and it's what I'm thinking.If this is supposed to sound like a letter written to a friend, then it's a great way to approach the subject and you've definitely made the point clear. But if it's supposed to be a poem, then it lacks structure and flow. Same thing if it's supposed to be a song. But like I said, if it's just a letter or just a thought, then it sounds great. -
This is about my friends Aidan who I havn't seen in a long time because he is lazy and is backsliding (A term for falling away from God, feel free to ask questions about it). Tell me what you think please.
Backsliding
I havn't seen you in a long time
Youv'e seen your job and your bed more than your friends
I miss you alot Aidan
You don'y have much time for anyone anymore
Even your girlfriend
Why are you so lazy?
You don't go to church anymore on Sunday
Or to AWANA on Friday night
I don't think everyone misses you as much
But I do
Your fading away in their minds
But not mine
My last memory of you was on a trampoline
Or at Awana
I can't remember
It was so long ago
Please come back
Not for me
For you
You are backsliding
And you know it
Drink Coffee if that would help
Everyone who goes to church on Sunday has to get up early
So why can't you?
And why not on Friday?
That's not too hard for you
I've had bad times too Aidan
But this, this is just not right
I want to stay your friend
But your drifting away from us all
Please come back Aidan
I miss you
Well, how is it?.
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But that doesn't say (in detail) what he's up to!!!.
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Oh but you must!!!. I have heard it!!!. Go here to hear it!!!. http://www3.telus.net/jefmil/stairwaybackwards.htmI don't believe it in the slightest!! -
Ok, what about these?.Coca Cola
Wood
Eyes
Think hard about this one!!!.
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Back in Black!!!.
Back in black
I hit the sack
I've been too long I'm glad to be back [i bet you know I'm...]
Yes, I'm let loose
From the noose
That's kept me hanging about
I've been looking at the sky
'Cause it's gettin' me high
Forget the hearse 'cause I never die
I got nine lives
Cat size!
Abusin' every one of them and running wild
CHORUS:
'Cause I'm back
Yes, I'm back
Well, I'm back
Yes, I'm back
Well, I'm back, back
(Well) I'm back in black
Yes, I'm back in black
Back in the back
Of a Cadillac
Number one with a bullet, I'm a power pack
Yes, I'm in a bang
With a gang
They've got to catch me if they want me to hang
Cause I'm back on the track
And I'm beatin' the flack
Nobody's gonna get me on another rap
So look at me now
I'm just makin' my play
Don't try to push your luck, just get out of my way
CHORUS
Well, I'm back, Yes I'm back
Well, I'm back, Yes I'm back
Well, I'm back, back
Well I'm back in black
Yes I'm back in black
hooo yeah
Ohh yeah
Yes I am
Oooh yeah, yeah Oh yeah
Back in now
Well I'm back, I'm back
Back, I'm back
Back, I'm back
Back, I'm back
Back, I'm back
Back
Back in black
Yes I'm back in black
Out of the sight
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no, it's cooking!!!.Bacon... -
Hmmm... what about these?.
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Didn't help much, but thanks anyway....
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My first request, Breaking the Girl by the Red Hot Chili Peppers still hasn't been put up, and that was ages ago!!!. Please help me!!!.
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Will someone please tell me what Jimmy Page is up to these days?!.
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LED ZEPPELIN!!!!!!!!!.
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Them poems you wrote have a lot of sadness in them, your poem's have mixed feeling, not just one through the whole thing, like that 4 line one. I can write better though....
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Definately 70's, no question about that mo fo!. Mainly because I love Led Zeppelin and Queen. The Red Hot Chili Peppers were good in the 80's, and still are
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Welcome back Danielj!!. But your a tadpole!!!.Oh man this is good, I put it to an 8-Bar Blues Reggaeish Riff This should be a hit at the variety show :: -
It was just something I thought of before I posted it. I'm going to try write some songs about myths and legends, and Isaac NewtonConstructive criticism? It's a bit cliched. Try spending more time on it and think over better ways to phrase the love you feel for the girl. You'll be a lot prouder of it if you spend lots of time working on it to get it perfect. -
Best of Nirvana is good, too bad Cobain blew his own head off, what an idiot. I find it a bit annoying when bands release a greatest hits album, and they are still around, such as the Red Hot Chili Peppers, but it's still a good album. I think AC/DC's best of album would be a mixture of Back in Black and High Voltage.
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The one in the Simpsons with Mel Gibson was good, and the one from Legally Blonde too!!!.
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Led Zeppelin
Queen
Red Hot Chili Peppers
AC/DC
Nirvana
Smashing Pumpkins
Metallica
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I like it
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This is probably the first happy poem ever here at songfacts
I love to see her smile
She makes me feel happy
I love giving her hugs
She is a great friend
Short, but sweet
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